改错笔记本

改错笔记本（推荐4篇）

改错笔记本篇1

有一天晚上睡觉时，我脑子里闪过一个想法：我想发明一个错别字笔记本。它的外形很美观，淡蓝色的外壳，长方形的外形。外壳上，正面用绿色的笔写上了“错别字笔记本”六个大字。里面装着一个改错器，它的核心是一台高智能的电脑，笔记本右上角有个小按钮。如果你做笔记或写作文时写了错别字，你却没有发现，没有及时修改。只要你按一下小按钮，它就会自动提醒你，让你修改。笔记本中夹着很多纸，你撕不下来也剪不开。这样可以帮我们养成爱护书本的好习惯。如果你乱涂乱画，你会画不上去。让你自动觉得不想画了。

小朋友，我想发明的这个笔记本好吗?有了这个笔记本，就会把错别字赶出笔记和写作中去，让每个学生的学习都有很大的进步。

当然，这是个梦想。不过，我相信一定会梦想成真，想象一定会变成现实。

单句改错篇2

短文改错（共10小题，每小题1分，满分10分）

假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文，请你修改你同桌写的以下作文。文中共有10处语言错误，每句中最多有两处。错误涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改。

增加：在缺词处加一个漏字符号（/）。并在其下面写出该加的词。

删除：把多余的词用斜线（/）划掉。

修改：在错的词下划一横线，并在该词下面写出修改后的词。

注意：1 每处错误及其修改均仅限一词；

只允许修改10处，多者（从第11处起）不记分。PartII 常见错误：

1、行文逻辑

2、上下文一致

3、词的搭配和词本身的用法

一、行文逻辑错误

语意矛盾：and-but

come –go

luckily-unluckily

here-there 语意重复：because-so;

though-but;

repeat-again;

improve-better;enter into;

marry with;

in last week;

all what;

the place where he lives in;the girl whom he works with her;主系表+to do it.练习：

1.I like singing, my brother likes playing football.2.Do you like sports? If not, join our football team.3.Unless you lose heart ,you’ll fail.4.He wrote to me immediately as soon as he got there.5.Though it was cold, but he went out.二、上下文一致 1.时态一致 2.主谓一致 3.指代一致

4.平行结构前后要一致

5.名词单复数与修饰语和上下文要一致 1.时态一致

1)I would like very much to come but I had an examination tomorrow.2)He offered me coffee and other drinks.We have a good time together.3)I’m sorry, I forget to post your letter.2.主谓一致

1)The students watches the teacher doing the experiment.2)Helping him are worthwhile.3)He as well as his friends know nothing about it.4).Not only he but also I keeps it a secret.3.指代一致

1)Pass Rose and I two pieces of bread, please.2)The football team has done well this year.All of their members have tried hard.3)He drove too fast and the police stopped her.4)This is true that he died in an accident yesterday.5)This is the best film which I have ever seen.6）The weather in Beijing is warmer than it in Jilin.4.平行结构前后要一致

1)He came in, opening his book and began to speak.2)She was eating her sandwich and drank her milk at the table.3)He wanted his children to come out and played.4)The more he has, and the more he wants.5)Sitting down, and he began to work.6)I live in Beijing，where is the capital of China.总结：平行结构连接词：and;but;or;both...and;not...but, either...or, neither...nor, not only...but(also), rather than，instead of

5.名词单复数与修饰语和上下文要一致 1)只修饰可数名词：a large/ great/ good number of, a good/ great many, dozens of, scores of, quite a few 2)只修饰不可数名词：a great deal of, a large amount of, quite a little 3)抽象名词具体化：a success;a failure;a surprise, 4)物质名词表一场、一杯、一份 a heavy rain;a coffee 5)常见的不可数名词：fun;advice;information;furniture;progress;luggage/baggage 6)零冠词：

1.三餐、季节和学科

2.表职务、头衔的表语、同位语或补足语

3.球类运动和棋类游戏

4.by+交通工具练习：

1)We study quite a few subject, such as maths , Chinese and physics.2)He gave me some valuable advices on how to learn English.3)It is pleasure to help others when they are in trouble.4)Large quantities of water is needed for cooling purpose.5)A overpass should be bulit over the road to avoid accidents.三、词的搭配及词本身的用法 1.动词

1)We should stop the children from play fire.2)He sat under the tree ate an apple.3)He wanted try it again.4)Do you know where he is lives ?

5)What your favorite sports? 6)The song has taught many times.7)What had been happened? 8)Play basketball is his favourite sport.9)He reading English in the morning every day.10.The news was really excited.11.He across the street quickly.12.The water is felt cold.13.He made me to post a letter for him.14.Working hard and you’ll succeed.总结：非谓语用法：主动关系用doing,被动用done ①实意动词一般时前不用be;

②vt被动不可缺be； ③vi不能被动故无be;

④系表结构中不可少be.2.形容词和副词

①系动词+形容词 ② 主谓宾+补语（形容词）

③形容词 +名词 ④句子+形容词（伴随状语）

① V +副词 ② 副词 +形容词③副词 + 副词④副词 +过去分词⑤副词 + 句子 1)The fish has gone bad.It tastes terribly.2)He walked very slow.3)The bad news made us sadly.4)People have been great helped by the computer.5)They think high of their new teacher.6)This dancer is much more younger than that one.注意：副词与形容词含义不同

l)close接近地

closely仔细地，密切地 2)free免费地

freely自由地，无拘束地 3)hard努力地

hardly几乎不 4)late晚，迟

lately近来 5)most极，非常

mostly主要地 6)wide广阔地，充分地 widely广泛地

7)high高

highly高度地，非常地 8)deep深，迟

deeply抽象意义的“深”

9)loud大声地

loudly大声地(含有喧闹的意思)10)near邻近

nearly几乎做题步骤：

1.浏览全文，掌握大意

2分句阅读，逐行找错

3.检查核对，攻克难点总结：

1.浏览全文看语意

2.句为单位查一致

3.逐个词汇找搭配

4.句子结构成分对

改错专题

一．“ 九见九查”法

（一）见平行结构（and连接）。查是否有用词不一致的错误 1.The doctor suggested plenty of food ,rest and exercising

2.She was eating her sandwich and drank her milk at the table when I arrived.3.She screamed , pushed him away and run to her room for the rest of the day.（二）见比较结构，查是否有形容词等级，程度副词，比较连词，比较对象的使用错误 1.Tom is clever than John.2.People in the modern world generally live much more longer than people in the past.3.Tom is as clever than John

4.There are more trees in villages than cities

(三)见有转折，因果，对比等句子结构，查是否有行文逻辑错误 1.I like singing , my brother likes dancing

2.A lady came to the window with the ball and shouted at the boy , and he ran away.3.Though I worked hard , but I failed to pass the exam.(四)见有多重句，查是否有时态语态混乱，引导词不当，成分缺失错误 1.He said that he is writing a new novel 2.Our task has finished so far.3.Whether you pay the cost of sending a postcard, the librarian will write to you.4.Tom asks Mark if he knows the man is speaking to him

（五）见有名词，代词，查是否有数、格、指代错误 1.Different people speak different language.2.Tom book is on the desk.3.The Smiths did his best to make me feel at home.（六）见有并列主语，从句做主语，动名词，不定式做主语，时间，距离，金钱等做主语，together with 等引导的成分修饰主语时，查是否有主谓不一致错误 1.Tom and John is good students.2.That the earth is round are known to us.3.What he needs are money.4.What he wants is three books.5.The family are a rich one and the family is very friendly.6 Playing football not only makes us grow tall and strong but also give us a sense of fair play and team spirit

7.Thirty dollars are enough.8.She as well as her brothers are fond of studying English.（七）见有短语，词组，查是否有固定结构中副词，介词或冠词使用不当错误 1.Suddenly I caught a sight of my English teacher in the crowd.2.When he came back , he found someone had broken in his house 3.In a fact he has three sons.4.Tom is seriously ill and he is in the hospital now.(八)见非谓语动词，查是否有非谓语动词使用错误 1.I enjoy watch TV.2.If heating , water can be changed into steam.3.She stood there , waited for his boy friend.(九)见有特殊动词或句型，查是否有句子语气错误 1.He ordered that the work must be started at once.2.It is high time that you go to school.讲后练：

（一）.Twenty minutes aren’t enough time to finish this test.2.Tom has sent to the nearest hospital.3.Whenever we couldn’t understand him, he will explain for us.4.They were made do the job from morning till night.5.Every means have been tried , but he won’t lose heart forever.6.How beautiful picture he has drawn!7.He was a medical student before he turned a writer.8.I was very angry ,but they were very angrier.9.She not only teaches our English , but also takes us out and shows us around.10.I will never forget the days when we spent together.11.He came to tell us that he had seen there.12.If you can pass the exam depends on how hard you work.13.We were having classes while someone knocked at the door.14.Nobody likes to be laughed as a fool.15.I want to find a hotel to live.16.We have to stay at home because the heavy rain.17.The reason why I didn’t go to France was I got a new job.18.If you will study hard , you will succeed.19.He was ill and his parents suggested that he had a medical examination.20.Today we invited Mr Bill , he is from England , to give us a lecture on how to improve our reading ability.讲后练

（二）：

Dear Peter

I’m sorry to hear that any of your classmates make a fun of you and you feel upset.Now I’d like to give you my suggestions.First of all ,you should take a right attitude to your disability , that is important.Secondly ,you’d better to ignore others’ remarks.Only in this way can you feel happy.Thirdly , it also help to believe in yourself and you will make a lot true friends.I’m sure what those who laugh at you will change his views on you sooner or later.I hope my advices will work and you can live happy.二语法错误

（一）动词错误

1.Whenever we couldn’t understand him , he will explain for us.2.He was ill and his parents suggested that he had a medical examination.3.Nobody except my parents know anything about it.4.Tom is one of the students who is from Beijing.5.Tom is the only one of the students who are from Beijing 6.Twenty –five dollars are too much to pay for that shirt.7.Fifty minutes aren’t enough time to finish this test.8.Ten miles seem like a long walk to me.9.Tom has sent to the nearest hospital.10.The bike outside is belonged to him

11.You can’t borrow it so long.12.I have bought the book for three days.13.They had got in touch with each other for ages.14.He wanted to see the report about an important football match the night before.15.All the visitors will be separated into four groups.16.He felt someone shouting at him.17.They were made do the job from morning till night.18.The boy went over at once , opened his umbrella for the grandpa.19.Today , too many trees are still been cut through the world.20.The boy stood over there is my little brother.21.For the most part , students working to earn money for their own use 22.When everything ready , the party began.(二)名词错误

1.It is a great fun to go skating on cold winter days.2.Every means have been tried , but he won’t lose heart forever.3.He suddenly appeared on a rainy night ,which was great surprise to us.4.He had no ideas that the kitchen was not for guests.5, Your knowledges of Greece can help the whole class.（三）冠词错误 1.Go and close window.2.I bought a book yesterday and book is ten yuan.3.Do you know older of the two boys ? 4.Whenever he eats out , he always eats a lot of food and spends too long a time at restaurant.5.I only want small supper.6.How beautiful picture he has drawn!7.Holding the Olympic Games is great success to a country.8.He died of the cancer.9.Mr.Li was elected the chairman of the meeting.10.He was a medical student before he turned a writer.11.On the way to the village , they met a 11-year –old boy

12.It is pleasure to help others when they are in trouble.13.The Turners are musical family.14.I have been living in the city for five years , five years makes a deep impression on me.15.His daughter plays piano very well.16.Finally we had good idea.（四）形容词与副词错误

1.He was lying in the hospital half deadly , with his ribs broken 2.What he said sounded quite perfectly , 3.It was raining heavily , Little Mary felt cold , so she stood closely to her mother.4.Teachers should receive farther education to catch up with the later development.5.Greenland , the large island in the world , covers two million square kilometers..6.It is generally true that the lower the stock markets fall , the high the price of gold rises 7.I was very angry , but they were very angrier.8.He is more cleverer than Tom.9.I feel fairly better today..The quicker a car is travelling , the longer it takes to stop.11.The book is very difficult for me.12.The members of the group are most young people 13.He mostly fell down.14.Tell the children to keep still , it’s not necessary to be anxious.15.I hope that you think about my request and visit us as soon as possibly.16.…… but he has to work if he wants to live comfortable.(五)代词错误 The twins begin to hate this kind of work with a force that destroy his happiness.2.She not only teaches our English , but also takes us out and shows us around.3.I teach me English.4.I think we will enjoy ourself.5.Oh ,dear.There are always not any taxis when you want it.6.He never helps other.7.He and his children felt tired but neither of them would stop for a rest.8.Today we invited Mr Bill , he is from England , to give us a lecture on how to improve our reading ability.9.He came to tell us that he had seen there.10.I will never forget the days when we spent together.11.Would you like any tea ?.There were 20 people around but no one helped the old man.13.---What is in the box ?----None 14.We need more three chairs.15.A bridge made of stone is stronger than that made of wood.16.The weather in Hangzhou is hotter than it in Beijing in summer.17.My pen is lost , and I’ll buy it.18.If you keep still , you can sit at both end of boat.19.Surely I’m expecting lots of sightseeing tours ,parties and another exciting things.（六）介词错误

1.In that particular evening ,there was a strange excitement in the air.2.The sunlight came in across the windows in the roof and lit up the whole room.3.All of us had a good time on that day.4.I was so tired that I fell asleep at the moment my head touched the pillow.5.Last Sunday we took a bus to visit to a farm.6.Unfortunately he found no room to live.7.Then they talked about what they had done since they graduated a university.8.Nobody likes to be laughed as a fool.9.He lives on 25, Nanjing Road , Shanghai.10.He helped the old man over the street.11.Your composition is good except a few spelling mistakes.12.On the font door stood a five-year –old boy from across the street.13.After autumn arrives , the city looks as an old man with falling from the tree.(七)情态动词错误

1.You can have a passport if you want to go abroad.2.Jeff mustn’t have been working hard for hours.He is not feeling tied.3.Some students may also to save up for their college or future use.4.He will recover soon.You can’t worry about him.5.Drivers can’t drive after drinking.6.You need be careful with your homework.7.Why can you do it that way.（八）连词错误

1.Which you can see , he is always ready to help others.2.Do like I told you.3.He was reading then he was walking.4.The thief handed everything which he had stolen to the police.5.I am happy as you passed the exam.6.Go to find your watch.It’s there where you left it.7.How an interesting story he told us!8.I can’t remember the thing what he told me.9.If you can pass the exam depends on how hard you work.10.We were having classes while someone knocked at the door.11.Because we’ve finished most of the work , let’s have a rest.12.As hard he works , he can’t catch up with his classmates.13.I became very active but made new friends.14.While they find fish come to the surface , they fly down immediately and catch them without delay.三句法和行文逻辑错误

（一）固定句型错误

1.When the child was a little boy , his mother was very poor that she had to send him to a rich family.2.It took him several hours persuade her to give up the idea, 3.I spent three hours do my homework.4.It was in 1986 when I went to college.5.He was just about to get on the bus then he heard someone calling him.6.How do you think of the film?

7.How is the weather like today ?(二)简单句错误

1.There had a discussion on how to solve the problem yesterday afternoon.2.There are three students study in the room.3.Which do you prefer , horse riding and shooting? 4.His parents didn’t allow him to do that , did he? 5.You have never been to Beijing , haven’t you ? 6.Holding yourself steady and you will not lose the balance.7.Tom , you water the flowers , don’t you ? 8.How beautiful flowers he gave me!9.How difficult problem it is!(三)复合句错误

1.The clever boy made a hole in the wall , through it he would see what was happening inside the house.2.I’ll never forget the days when we spent in Qingdao

（四）行文逻辑错误

1.This was a lie ,and his teacher did not know.2.Clever as she is , but she works hard.3.Hi , everyone.First , let me tell you something more about myself.4.John and Jack went to the same school and then to the same university.So they hadn’t met each other since then.5.I’ll never forget the first day at the factory , we arrived here early in the morning.6.There were many great people in history.But many of them are poor in childhood.Schools were few and not good.They couldn’t depend on it for a good education.四

直击高考

（一）多一词的情况（介词，副词，连词，代词，助动词，冠词，小品词 to）1.The secretary told me that the manager was busy and I should come at some other tome.2.I met my uncle in last Sunday.3.At the last time I saw her , she was playing with her friends near the river 4.When we got to his house , we found him in home.5.The crowd waited for to greet them in England.6.Her strength made me stronger and gave to me courage to try things..7.It is about 200 miles far away from London , and it has a very big schoolyard.8.Although he is very young , but he can retell the story very fluently.9.My parents sent me an e-mail to ask whether how I was getting along with my studies.10.In some parts of the forest where you can find large groups of monkeys which are jumping up and down.11.Since you have visited Greece several times , so I would like to know whether you have seen the old buildings there.12.He writes about books about his travels and about the wild and wonderful animals that he collects them.13.The movement of the parts is beautiful to watch it if they are clear.14.I read your e-mail to my parents and showed them the photo you sent it to me.15.My first one job was to clean the tables in a small restaurant

16.If you will study hard , you will succeed.17.She had taught us English when I attended training courses two years ago.18.This experience has been shown that travelling by air actually is the safest way of making journeys.19.I’m glad to learn that you’ve been settled down in Boston ….20.We hung a sign on the front door that was read : “We’re having dinner.Come back later”

21.Wang Ping was badly ill last night.He was sent to the hospital.22.I told the boy not to write silly things in the public places.23.Music can bring people a pleasure.24.I’m glad you have made such a great progress.25.I will let someone to repair the TV set.26.On cold winter days , many cold-blooded animals have nothing to do but to go to their cave and sleep.27…..he can have the great happiness of seeing himself to make steady progress in his job.28.…..you always gave me special attention and inspired to me to join in activities.(二)缺一词的情况（介词，连词，冠词，小品词，代词，助动词）

1.I want to find a hotel to live 2.The ice is too thin for us to skate

公文改错篇3

×府发×字[2003]28号签发人×××

___________________________________________________________________________________

××市人民政府办公厅关于

申请维修省政府机关办公室的通知

省财政厅：

省府机关办公室多是50、60年代修建的，不少门窗破烂，漏水严重，急需要维修。请拨给房屋修缮费

五十万元。如蒙同意，不胜感激。

以上请示，请批准。

省政府办公厅

2003年3月5日主题词：拨款维修

抄报：省政府

（一）原文存在的问题（10分—括号内为正确内容）眉者部分：A政府（人民政府）B公文（文件）C签发人（删去不用）

D发文字号（删去“×字”）主体部分：E通知（函）F五十万元（50万元）G以上请示，请批准（当否，请函复。）H2003年3月5日（二00三年三月五日）版记部分：I主题词（加“函”）J抄报（抄送）

（二）写出正确规范的公文（10分）文种正确（函）4分。

公文改错题篇4

（一）关于拟请批转《2012年全国科技活动周宣传工作方案》的函

×科〔2012〕122号

市委宣传部：

根据科技部、中宣部、中国科协《关于举办2012年科技活动周的通知》（国科发政〔2012〕137号）和《关于举办“2012年××市科技活动周”的通知》（×科活动〔2012〕第001号）精神，以“携手建设创新型国家”为主题的2012年全国科技活动周将于5月19日至25日在各地举行。为做好宣传工作，扩大活动的社会知晓度和群众参与率，充分体现科技活动周作为大型群众性科普活动的特色，形成人人关注创新、支持创新、参与创新的良好局面，我委会同市科普工作联席会议成员单位，草拟了《2012年××市科技活动周宣传工作方案》，现报你部会审，并请审定后批转各有关新闻传媒单位予以执行。

特此报告，请复。附件：

1.2012年××市科技活动周宣传工作方案

2.科技部、中宣部、中国科协《关于举办2012年科技活动周的通知》 3.《关于举办“2012年××市科技活动周”的通知》。联系人：李××

联系电话：××××××××

××市科学技术委员会（公章）二〇一二年四月二十七日

【参考答案】

（1）标题标点符号有误。党政机关的公文标题中除法规、规章名称加书名号外，一般不用标点符号。故此公文标题应删除书名号。

（2）发文字号错误。正文中个“×科活动〔2012〕第001号”错误，发文顺序号不设虚位，不加“第”字，应为“×科活动〔2012〕1号”。

（3）词语搭配不当。正文中“扩大活动的社会知晓度和群众参与率”，“扩大”与“参与率”搭配不当，应为“扩大活动的社会知晓度，提高群众参与率”。

（4）结束与使用不当。根据公文题目和内容，文种为“请批函”，结束语应为“盼复”、“专此函达”、“即请函复”等。

（5）附件格式错误。如有附件，在正文下空一行左空二字编排“附件”二字，后标全角冒号和附件名称。如有多个附件，使用阿拉伯数字标注附件顺序号（如：附件：1.××××××”）；附件名称后不加标点符号。附件名称较长需回行时，应当与上一行附件名称的首字对齐。

（6）成文日期书写格式错误。成文日期用阿拉伯数字将年、月、日标全，年份应标全称，月、日不编虚位（即1不编为01），应为“2012年4月27日”。

（二）关于组织中层干部赴××监狱开展警示教育的

请示报告

××监狱：

为了加强反腐倡廉教育，增强干部廉洁自律意识，我校组织中层干部赴贵监狱开展警示教育，并附带参观监狱附近高新科技工业园区，活动定于六月二十日，活动内容按贵监狱的有关规定执行。

【参考答案】

（1）标题中文种选用不当。结合正文可知，该公文的主要内容是我校就赴**监狱开展警示教育一事向该监狱请求批准。故应去掉“报告”二字。

（2）请示正文部分坚持“一文一事”的原则。故应去掉“并附带参观监狱附近高新科技工业园区”。

（3）正文结尾部分应加上结束语，如“特此请示，望批复”。（4）缺落款，应在落款部分标注成文日期，并盖章。

（三）局属各单位：

为了响应市委“绿地城乡、美化黄村”的号召，积极参加今年义务植树节有关活动，现决定本周双休日赴市郊黄村岗参加义务植树，请贵单位按照分配的任务积极组织人员参加。另：植树活动结束后，还将举行全市卫生防疫工作部署动员大会，请有关单位做好发言准备并上报上个月考勤表。请支持为谢！

××市卫生局

二〇一三年三月十日

【参考答案】

（1）缺少标题。应添加标题“关于植树节活动的通知”，居中。（2）通知时间表意不确切。应将“本周双休日”改为具体的日期。（3）表意有误。通知是一种下行文，应将“贵单位”改为“各单位”。

（4）“另：植树活动结束后，还将举行全市卫生防疫工作部署动员大会，请有关单位做好发言准备并上报上个月考勤表。”此句不属于本次通知的内容，应另发文或口头通知。

（5）“请支持为谢！”不妥，语气过于曲意客套，通知是上级领导机关对所属的下级机关的一种行文，语气应比较严肃、庄重。因此，应将“请支持为谢！”改为“特此通知，望各单位认真贯彻落实。”

（6）落款“二〇一三年三月十日”应该为2013年3月10日。

（四）关于推荐陈雨等九位同志参加××考察活动的请示报告

×财发［2012］09号

省外办：

根据你办《关于组织××省第九届对外交流考察活动的通知》精神，经我局研究决定，同意推荐陈雨等2位同志参加××考察活动，名单附后：

××行李强高级会计师 ××所陈雨所长报告当否，请批示。

××市财政局 2012年8月10日

【参考答案】

（1）标题中“请示和报告”矛盾，应去掉“报告”。

（2）发文号“×财发［2012］09号”，应该为“×财发〔2012〕9号”。（3）主送机关简称不对，应为“××省”。（4）名单中应将“陈雨”提前。

（5）推荐人员应先写名字，后注明单位和职称。（6）结尾应改为“以上请示当否，请批示”。（7）落款排列有误，应分两行排列。

（五）请示

因工作需要，我县急需购买小轿车一辆，请批准调拨经费×××××元。另：我县尚缺专业对口技术人员××名，请在制定明年人员编制时一并考虑。上述意见与要求如无不妥，请批复。此致敬礼！

××县人民政府 ××县财政局 2013年6月

【参考答案】

（1）文件格式不正确：无主送单位，缺少发文字号，成文日期没有具体到日。（2）违反行文规定：根据《办法》，请示内容必须“一文一事”，而文中有两件事情。（3）尾语啰嗦：“此致”和“敬礼”由于上面已经有了期复性尾语，故无必要写。（4）文件内容不恰当：购买“轿车”，对于县政府来说不需要向上级调拨经费，由县财政自身解决。但需要由主管物资控购办公室批准才能购买。购车理由不充分。“人员编制”问题，应届时再办。

修改如下：

××县人民政府办公室文件 ×县政发〔2013〕××号

关于申请购置轿车的函

地区政府物资控购办公室：

我县是方圆200多公里的大县，外出办公事宜很多，现县政府原有的两辆小轿车是十年前添置的，现在经常出故障，已近乎报废，影响我县外出办公。所以，特申请购置一辆小轿车，恳请批准为盼。

附：《购置轿车申报表》一份。

××县人民政府办公室（章）2013年×月×日

（六）××市工业总公司文件公司发〔201×〕×号

关于加强自检，坚决杀住企业吃喝风的通知

各厂矿、工厂：

总公司财经纪律检查组本次年底大检查，发现各单位年底宴请频繁，名目繁多的请客送礼，导致很大浪费，广大工人同志对企业干部这种腐败现象极为不满，广大党员对此极为不满。各单位要为了加强廉政建设，维护企业利益，所以总公司办公会议研究决定，各单位必须成立纪检小组。通过加强自检，并在一个月内，将自检报告上报给公司。

特此通知。

××市工业总公司二○一×年×月×日

【参考答案】

（1）标题中有错字，“杀住”应为“刹住”。

（2）根据文种“通知”的写作要求，通知应当有具体事项。该文具体安排事项不够明确，不便于开展工作。例如：成立自检小组，在什么时间开展自检，又在什么具体时间内完成？“一个月”，有些模糊。

（3）句子有语病：

“宴请频繁，名目繁多的请客送礼”，句子中的“宴请”和“请客”概念重复。“导致很大浪费”句中动宾不搭配，应改为“造成很大浪费”。

“各单位要为了加强廉政建设，维护企业利益，所以总公司办公会议研究决定，各单位必须成立纪检小组”。该句子句式杂糅。应删去“各单位要”。

（4）主送单位“各厂矿、工厂”语义重复，删去后面的“工厂”。（5）标点多处错误。

（6）成文日期应用阿拉伯数字，“ 二○一×年×月×日”应该为“201×年×月×日”。

修改如下：

××市工业总公司文件公司发〔201×〕×号

关于加强自检，坚决刹住企业吃喝风的通知

各直属单位、分公司和厂矿：

总公司财经纪律检查组在本次年底大检查中，发现各单位年底以各种名目送礼，高档宴请，给国家和集体造成极大的浪费。广大工人同志对这种腐败现象极为不满，广大党员对此极为不满。为了加强廉政建设，维护国家和集体的利益，经总公司办公会议研究决定，各单位要坚决刹住吃喝风，严禁公款送礼。并在全系统内，开展廉政自检工作。为此特将有关事宜通知如下。

一、各单位自201×年×月×日起，由所在单位一把手、工会负责人和财务部门组成纪检小组，•并于201×年×月×日将自检小组名单上报总公司办公室。

二、各单位自检项目如下：

„„„„

三、各单位自检工作，于201×年×月×日始至×月×日初步结束，并将自检报告上报给公司。

各单位接到通知后，必须从思想上高度重视，切实把廉政自检工作搞好。

××市工业总公司 201×年×月×日

（七）解决校园监控系统建设资金的请示报告

太原市教育局、财政局：

因网络的日益繁荣，我校想着手建设校园监控系统，经过相关监控系统公司预算需要投入经费壹佰万元。为使工程尽快上马，加快教学质量改进，我校特向你们提出要求拨款，以解燃眉之急。另外，因教学需要，还请求增加教师10名。特此报告，请立即批复。

太原市宏科高级职业中学

2012年12月10日

【参考答案】

（1）题目缺少“关于”。

（2）请示报告不能一起使用，此处应为请示。

（3）“因网络的日益繁荣，我校想着手建设校园监控系统”没有因果联系，存在逻辑错误。

（4）“壹佰”使用不当，应使用阿拉伯数字“100”。

（5）“加快教学质量改进”有语法错误，可以改为“提高教学质量”。（6）“我校特向你们提出要求拨款”中“你们”使用不当。（7）“还请求增加教师10名”不妥，请示应一文一事。（8）“报告”用词不对。

（9）“请立即批复”，命令语气不适于请示。

（八）×××市人民政府办公厅通报

全体市民：

据反应得知，近日来本市部分地区有一种令人人心惶惶的传说，称原流行于某国的恶性传染病××热已传入本市，并已造成十几人死亡。经本市防疫部门证实，这是完全没有任何事实根据的，本市至今从未发生过一起××热的病例。经核查，这一消息源于本市《晨报》壹零年4月1日的一则“愚人节特快报告”。《晨报》这种不顾国情照搬西方文化极不严肃的做法是非常错误的，已经给全市人民的稳定生活带来了极其恶劣的影响。目前有关部门已对本报作出停业整顿并令其主要负责人深刻检查等待纪律处分的处理。有关单位应汲取这一教训，采取措施以予杜绝。特此通报。

×××市人民政府启

二零壹零年四月十日

【参考答案】（1）标题缺事由。

（2）不应直接主送市民，通报可不加主送机关。（3）“据反应得知”中“反应”应改为“反映”。（4）“传说”一词不妥。

（5）文中日期混用，数字要用阿拉伯数字，成文日期也一样。（6）“本报”一词错用。（7）发文机关前后不一。（8）“以予”一词颠倒。

（9）“特征通报”空两格，不顶格。（10）作者后的“启”字为错用。

（九）关于办理商标注册附送证件问题的批复

《关于办理商标注册附送证件问题的请示》收悉，国务院大致同意关于办理商标变更、转让或者续展注册时不再附送原商标注册证的意见，但考虑到这一问题涉及《商标法实施细则》的修改，特批复如下，盼遵照执行。

本批发第一项、第四项由你局在二零一二年十二月十五日前发布。

国务院

二零一二年九月十日制发【参考答案】（1）标题不完整。（2）缺主送机关。

（3）“大致同意”用法不当。（4）实施细则应用全称。（5）“盼遵照执行”语气不当

（6）“二零一二年十二月十五日”、“ 二零一二年九月十日”应改为阿拉伯数字。（7）“制发”二字多余。

（十）各县人民政府：

今年初，董镇信用社职工××同志为保卫国家财产，面对英勇歹徒，顽强搏斗，最后擒获歹徒。为此决定授予××同志见义勇为先进个人称号。

市政府希望各条战线的群众、工人、农民、知识分子认真贯彻十三届四中、5中、6中全会精神，胸怀全局，艰苦奋斗，努力工作，为社会主义现代化建设做出更大贡献。

XX市委、XX市政府 13年4月8日

【参考答案】

（1）应注明标题，“XX市委、XX市政府关于授予XX同志先进工作者称号的决定”。（2）主送单位应顶格写，主送单位应为“县（市、区）委、人民政府”。（3）“今年初”这一时间概念表达不当，应改为“2013年初”。（4）董镇前应冠以县名。（5）“英勇歹徒”的表达有误。（6）发文单位为两家，市委、市政府。（7）“群众、工人、农民”等搭配不当。

（8）“5中、6中全会”数字表达不一致，不应用阿拉伯数字。应改为“五中、六中全会”。（9）发文机关署名排列有误，不加盖印章的公文，发文机关署名应上下对齐，依次向下排列。

（10）日期书写有误，年份应标全称，即2013年。

通报

病文：

关于李某某的通报

各学院、处、室，各班级：

我校10级计算机专业学生李某某，2011年3月6日中午到学生食堂吃饭的时候，看到排队打饭的人多，就要强行插队打饭。有同学劝他要遵守纪律时，他还大声说：”管你屁事！“一位纠察队员走过来阻止他，他不管三七二十一，拿起饭碗就打在纠察队员的头上。致使那位纠察队员头部受伤。李某某的行为引起了在场其他同学的公愤，有人甚至叫嚷要把他来到派出所去关押起来。

据查李某某平时学习也不刻苦，上学期末考试有一科仅得21分。

经学校研究决定，给予李某某以记过一次处分。

希望广大同学以此为戒，努力学习，争取在期末考试中取得好成绩。某某职业技术学院

2011年4月8日评析：

第一、有些材料不是主旨需要的，学习成绩等，不利于对学生的教育也不利于主旨的表达。如果李平常也有类似事件发生，也只能作为背景材料简略写出。

第二、缺少对李**错误事实性质的评价，不利于主旨的鲜明突出，也不利于提高学生的思想认识。

第三、提出希望部分内容离开主旨。

第四、语言欠提练，如“他还大声说：“关你屁事！”一位纠察队员走过来阻止他，他不管三七二十一”。

第五、标题的意义不够清楚，主要是事由不完整。

修改后：

关于对李某某打人事件的通报各班级：

我校2010级计算机专业学生李某某，于2011年3月6日中午到食堂吃饭，看到排队人多，就强行插队，值班同学立即制止，他非但不听反而辱骂甚至用饭碗殴打纠察队员。致使纠察队员受伤。

李某某无视校规校纪，伤害值班同学的行为，造成极为恶劣的影响，依照《学校学生管理规定》，为教育李某某本人，使广大同学引以为戒，经某某学生处研究决定，给予李某某记过处分。

学校希望李**同学吸引教育，遵守纪律，也要求各班级同学必须严格执行学校的规章，加强道德修养教育，倡导文明礼让新风尚，杜绝此类事件再度发生。

某某职业技术学院

2011年4月8日

报告

5、病文分析

关于××高速公路塌方事故的报告

××市建设委员会：

2003年5月20日，××高速公路××路段发生塌方事故，造成一定的伤亡后果。事故发生前，桥面上分散有二三十名工人，已浇铸了近200立方的混凝土，而且违章施工，按照程序应分两次浇铸的混凝土却一次浇铸，估计事故原因是桥面负荷过重。

事故发生后，近200名消防队员、工地工人、公安干警到现场紧张抢救，抢救时间持续近28小时。据查，该工程承建商是××市市政总公司一分公司。

特此报告。

××市政工程总公司 2003年5月25日

评析：情况报告的正文一般由情况或问题发生的经过（时间地点背景）、原因、责任分析、处理意见、应吸取的教训等部分构成，并依次撰写。撰写时要围绕报告的主题，对情况要作出实事求是的记叙，并进行客观具体的分析，提出切实可行的措施。这份情况报告报告存在以下几方面问题：

1、内容安排杂乱。事故发生与抢救分开写，中间插入原因说明。层次不清，条理混乱。

2、事实和情况不清。“造成一定的伤亡后果”不准确，模糊不清。应有具体数据加以说明。

3、事故原因和责任者不明确。“估计事故原因是桥面负荷过重”。

4、缺少处理意见。

请示

6、病文改错

关于增拨办税大厅基建经费的请示

×××省人民政府、××省长：

2003年11月，我局派出调查组到广西柳州市国税局学习考察其办税大厅建设情况。调查组认为办税大厅功能齐全，适应税收征管模式的改革，方便纳税人缴纳税款。为此，我局于2004年决定建办税大厅，并得到省人民政府的支持，在×府【2004】×号文“关于拨款修建办税大厅的批复”中，拨给我局150万，此项资金已专款专用。

但由于建筑材料涨价，原预算资金缺口较大，恳请省人民政府拨给不足部分，否则将影响办税大厅的竣工及我省税收任务的完成。

特此请示报告

××省地方税务局

二00五年十月十日评析：

1、缘由部分没有把请示理由说清楚。其对上级提出的请求是“增拨办税大厅基建经费”，应该把“增拨”的理由、根据作为重点说清楚、讲充分，但拟写者却花了整整一大段去说为什么要建办税大厅的理由和省政府的批复，这些材料与“增拨”关系并不大。第二段虽然写到了增拨经费的原因，但仅有“由于建筑材料涨价，原预算资金缺口较大”的空话，没有事实、没有具体情况，没有说服力。

2、请示事项不明确。“恳请省人民政府拨给不足部分”太笼统，上级也难以作出批示。

3、主送机关违背了“只写一个主送机关”和“不得直接送领导个人”的规则

4、结束语不恰当，没有表现出“请求”的意思，文种名称也混淆了。应改为“以上请求，恳请批准。”

5、成文时间应用阿拉伯数字。

批复

5、病文分析：病文1

关于修建新办公大楼请示的批复

××厂：

有关请示已悉。关于修建新办公楼一事，经研究，还是以不建为宜。此复。

××××有限公司二○○五年五月五日评析：

1.未写批复引语。“有关请示已悉”一句，没有明白说明批复是针对有关什么问题的请示，也没有引述来文的发文字号。

2.态度含糊不清。“还是以不建为宜”，语气不决断，态度不明确，让受文单位难以执行。3.没有说明不同意新建办公楼的理由。